Poetry (Haiku)
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Sat Jul 04, 2009 7:02 am
Okay...just some poems I write in my spare time. ><

Luna

Silver threaded light above.
Lacing the clouds with shimmering love,
Like a peaceful dove.

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Fri Jul 17, 2009 9:13 am
Technically, that is not a Haiku. Haiku's follow a pattern of five syllables, then seven, then five.

Though as a poem, it is quite a piece. The poem has a melodic tune to it. If you'd like, you could possibly cut down the first two lines to make it a Haiku, though in my opinion just calling it a poem and keeping it the same would be much simpler. I wouldn't want to cut down such a piece.

I believe you did a fabulous job. As a poem, not necessarily a Haiku.
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